假定你是李华，现在是华南师范大学(South China Normal University)大一新生，你高三时在王老师的帮助下，英语进步很大，为表示感谢，给王老师写一封感谢信。要点如下：

1. 梦想成真，考上理想大学。

2. 因为王老师的辅导和鼓励，英语由差变好。

3. 对老师表示祝福。

注意：1. 词数100左右。

2. 可以适当增加细节以使行文连贯。

3.开头和结尾已给出，但不计入总词数。

Dear Mr.Wang,

___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Yours,

Li Hua

答案

Dear Mr. Wang,

I’m writing to express my thanks for your helping me improve my English. Without your help, I wouldn’t be a student of South China Normal University.

I still remember the days when you taught me English in Senior Three. My English was once poor, but you were very patient with me and tried to tutor me after class. My English was greatly improved owing to your encouragement. But for you, my dear teacher, I wouldn’t have realized my dream. I wish more and more of your students could go to their ideal colleges. And wish you a healthy and happy life.

Again, I sincerely thank you for your help.

Yours,

Li Hua

【分析】

本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求写一封感谢信。

【详解】

这是一篇提纲类作文，我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来。动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，不能遗漏要点：1. 梦想成真，考上理想大学；2. 因为王老师的辅导和鼓励，英语由差变好；3. 对老师表示祝福。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。根据写作要点我们可以初步确定文章可能使用到的词汇和短语及句子有：express my thanks for your helping me improve my English，Without your help I wouldn’t be a student of South China Normal University，you taught me English in Senior Three. be patient with me，try to tutor me after class，My English was greatly improved owing to your encouragement. But for you, my dear teacher, I wouldn’t have realized my dream. I wish you a healthy and happy life. I sincerely thank you for your help.。可以使用的衔接词：1.表文章结构顺序：First of all，Firstly/First，Secondly/Second… And then，Finally，In the end，At last，Above all。2.表并列补充关系：What is more，Besides，Moreover，Furthermore，In addition，as well as，not only…but (also)。通过词汇铺垫，我们就很容易地行文了，文章写完之后要检查文中是否存在拼写或语法错误。

【点睛】

本文是一封感谢信，内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。同时文中使用高级句子：Without your help, I wouldn’t be a student of South China Normal University.这句话中使用了虚拟语气；I still remember the days when you taught me English in Senior Three. 这句话中使用了when引导的定语从句；I wish more and more of your students could go to their ideal colleges.这句话中wish后面的宾语从句使用了虚拟语气。