假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。你的英国笔友 Jim 在给你的邮件中提到他最近过度使用手机,日常生活受到影响,他为此感到苦恼。请你给他回复邮件,内容包括:
1. 表示理解;
2. 你的建议及理由。
注意: 1. 词数 100 左右;
2. 开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Dear Jim,
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours,
Li Hua
Dear Jim,
I am sorry to know you are troubled by cellphone overuse. As a heavy cellphone user myself, I totally understand the stress and frustration you are feeling.
Fortunately, we can do a few things about it. For instance, we can set certain hours of the day as “cellphone time” and only pick up the phone during those hours. By doing so, we can reduce our screen time. We may also participate in group activities where we meet people face to face and thus don’t need to rely on the phone all the time to contact others.
I hope my suggestions can help and I'm sure you will get through this. Let me know if I can help in any way.
Yours,
Li Hua
【分析】
本篇书面表达属于应用文,要求考生给英国笔友 Jim 回复邮件,对他在邮件中提到最近过度使用手机,日常生活受到影响表示理解,并给出建议。
【详解】
第一步:审题
体裁:应用文
时态:根据提示,时态主要为一般现在时。
结构:总分法
总分法指把主题句作为总说,把支持句作为分说,并以这种方式安排所写内容。
要求:
1. 表示理解;
2. 你的建议及理由。
第二步 : 列提纲 (重点词组)
trouble , understand , set certain hours , pick up , participant in , face to face , rely on , get through
第三步:连词成句
I am sorry to know you are troubled by cellphone overuse.
As a heavy cellphone user myself, I totally understand the stress and frustration you are feeling.
Fortunately, we can do a few things about it.
For instance, we can set certain hours of the day as “cellphone time” and only pick up the phone during those hours.
We may also participate in group activities where we meet people face to face and thus don’t need to rely on the phone all the time to contact others.
I hope my suggestions can help and I’m sure you will get through this.
根据提示及关键词(组)进行遣词造句,注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步:连句成篇(衔接词)(供参考)
1. 表文章结构顺序: First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last
2. 表并列补充关系: What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,
3. 表转折对比关系: However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause( 从句 ), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…
4. 表因果关系: Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result
连句成文,注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡,书写一定要规范清晰,
【点睛】
【 高分句型 1 】
We may also participate in group activities where we meet people face to face and thus don’t need to rely on the phone all the time to contact others. 使用了 where 引导的定语从句和不定式作目的状语
【 高分句型 2 】
I hope my suggestions can help and I’m sure you will get through this. 使用了并列句和宾语从句
请认真阅读下列短文,并根据所读内容在文章后表格中的空格里填入一个最恰当的单词。注意:每个空格只填1个单词。
Feeling extreme loneliness can increase an older person’s risk of premature (过早的)death by 14 percent, according to research by John Cacioppo, professor of psychology at the University of Chicago.
Cacioppo and his colleagues’ work shows that the impact of loneliness on premature death is nearly as strong as the impact of disadvantaged socioeconomic status, which they found increases the chances of dying early by 19 percent. A 2010 meta﹣analysis showed that loneliness has twice as much impact on early death as obesity does, he said.
The researchers looked at dramatic differences in the rate of decline in physical and mental health as people aged. Cacioppo and his colleagues have examined the role of satisfying relationships on older people to develop their resilience ([rɪˈzɪliəns] 快速恢复的能力;适应力), the ability to feel better quickly after something unpleasant, and grow from stresses in life.
The consequences for health are dramatic, as feeling isolated or separated from others can disturb sleep, elevate blood pressure, increase morning rises in the stress hormone cortisol ([‘kɔ:tɪsɒl] 皮质醇), change the gene expression in immune cells, increase depression and lower overall subjective well﹣being, Cacioppo pointed out in a talk, “ Rewarding Social Connections Promote Successful Aging.”
Cacioppo, one of the nation’s leading experts on loneliness, said older people can avoid the consequences of loneliness by staying in touch with former co﹣workers, taking part in family traditions, and sharing good times with family and friends ﹣ all of which give older adults a chance to connect with others about whom they care and who care about them.
”Retiring to Florida to live in a warmer climate among strangers isn’t necessarily a good idea if it means you are disconnected from the people who mean much to you,” said Cacioppo. Population changes make understanding the role of loneliness and health all the more important,he explained. “People have to think about how to protect themselves from depression, low subjective well﹣being and early death. “
Although some people are happy to be alone, most people develop from social situations in which they provide mutual support and establish a strong bond. Evolution encourages people to work together to survive and accordingly most people enjoy companionship compared to be alone.
It is not solitude (独处)or physical isolation itself, but rather the subjective sense of isolation that Cacioppo’s work shows to be so destructive. Older people living alone are not necessarily lonely if they remain actively engaged in social life and enjoy the company of those around them. Some aspects of aging, such as blindness and loss of hearing, however, place people at special risk of becoming isolated and lonely, he said.
Passage outline | Supporting details |
The main idea | Chances are that older people will die early if they feel extremely 51.. |
52. with loneliness | • Like disadvantaged socioeconomic status and obesity, loneliness can 53. old men’s premature death. • When 54. from others, one will find physical health impacted and tend to feel depressive and unhappy. |
Suggestions | • Keep in touch with others and take part in 55. activities. • Choosing to live in a pleasant climate don’t necessarily make sense if the elder are disconnected from people who are 56. to them. • Think about how to57. depression, low subjective well﹣being and early death. • Work together with others to 58., to gain mutual support and establish a strong bond. |
Conclusions | • The sense of isolation, rather than solitude or physical isolation itself, isn’t 59.to elders. • Living alone doesn’t mean loneliness if older people live an 60. social life. |